Round 1
JUPITER:
8 for clarity- I was slightly confused about the angle in which jupter is coming towards Cant at, had to draw myself a diagram to relate her position with her attack. -2
10 for powerplaying.None seen
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen
7 for attack. shoulder check +1, paw slam +2, bite to face (maim)+4
10 for injuries.First round
Round one JUPITER Total: 45/50
CANTA:
6 for clarity- how much damage was received when jup’s shoulder hit canta’s jaw? -1, was her balance affected by her stumbling? -1, how did her stumble affect her position in relation to jup? -1, “cant snaps her legs back into their previous position?” where did they move to? -1
10 for powerplaying. None seen
9 for defenses. +1 one for each seen, -1 for not adjusting her defenses to the lifting her paw
3 for attack. shoulder check +1, paw slam +2
10 for injuries.First round
Round one CANTA Total: 38/50
Round 2
JUPITER:
7 for clarity- Not sure how Canta’s paw would miss Jups paw unless Jups forepaws slide forward when she leaned back -1, Im not entirely sure when Jup lowers her body, I think I know when, but its not super clear -1, what damage did Jup take from canta’s shoulder -1
3 for powerplaying. it would take a series of bites to break a major bone -1, even if you move positions, you still need to take damage -1, giving your opponent the option to break free of your grip in a way forces them powerplay, you need to make it clear exactly what damage you take, and what will happen to your hold, don’t leave anything up in the air -3
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen
5 for attack. thrashing her head +1, +4 for grip on canta’s face,
8 for injuries. moderate bruising to the left/upper portion of her neck (judge decision) -2,
Round two JUPITER Total: 33/50
CANTA:
6 for clarity- how much damage was done to her face? -1, where/how is she hoping to ram Jupiter? -1, which angle is her head moving to bite Jup’s face? -1, what side of the face is canta trying to bite? -1
7 for powerplaying. If you rip free of an opponents grasp, then you need to state what damage you tool -2, and even though Jup stated that Canta /could/ get free of her grip, you still need to attempt to get free -1
8 for defenses. +1 for each seen
4 for attack. bite to the face +3, body ram +1
7 for injuries. severe lacerations to the right side of her face surrounding her eye, will scar -3
Round two CANTA Total: 32/50
Totals:
JUPITER: 78/100
CANTA: 70/100
And the winner is...
Jupiter! Canta must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
JUPITER- pending damage to the left side of her face from Canta’s bite if she obtains a grip that could scar.
CANTA- missing right eye.
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For Starsight
Your posts are pretty clear and easy to understand, just watch out for how you explain your positioning in relation to your opponent. Also, remember conditionals result in point loss (ie if I do this, then this will happen).
For Lolaf
Your posts were also clear and easy to understand, just remember to use more complex attacks and thoroughly describe your injuries. And I apologize for the wait! School has been crazy.
- By [saffie]
