Round 1
LIAN:
10 for clarity: All clear to me!
8 for powerplaying. “with no warning he would go to leap, pushing with all his might into his back legs.” This needs to be attempted. Also there was no distance set between them so it can make it hard to tell if this would be possible or not. -2
9 for defences. eyes narrowed, lips snarling, ears back, shoulders rolled, chin tucked (next time please say what its tucking to, like chin tucked to chest), weight distributed evenly, legs bent, hackles raised, muscles clenched. (I didn't count the “...he lashed out his tail for balance...” Because it either needs to align with spine or tuck between the legs. This doesn't specify either.)
4 for attack. Left shoulder to chest +1, Bite to muzzle plus hold attempt +3
10 for injuries.First round
Round one LIAN Total: 41/50
VITUS:
5 for clarity: “insantly swivelled his hind end around to the left” How did he turn? Stepping? Spinning? -1 “and he knew his flesh would bruise.” How severe is the damage? Minor, moderate, severe? -2 “shredding the flesh along his cheek and the top of his skull, too close to his eyes.” Again, how severe? -2
9 for powerplaying. “he would thrust his own shoulder up” Needs to be attempted. -1
5 for defences. Lips snarling, eyes narrowed, ears pulled back, shoulders rolled, bent legs
3 for attack. shoulder slam to throat +3
10 for injuries. First round. Moderate bruise to chest -1(determined by judge), moderate lacerations to left side of face -2 (determined by judge)
Round one VITUS Total: 32/50
Round 2
LIAN:
6 for clarity: “...rather awful bruising within the limb.” How severe is this wound? -2 “Lian would try to rake his teeth over the flesh as he pulled away to increase the damage.” Where on his face? -1 “He'd aim for his left eye, hoping to wound it and make him remember his defeat here.” Wound it in what way? A scratch? A bruise? -1
6 for powerplaying. “...Lian would open his jaws and reach for the boy's scruff.” Must be attempted. -1 Vitus' shoulder slam to Lian's throat was not mentioned in your post. That would do some serious damage, as well as stun him. -3
7 for defences. eyes narrowed, weight distributed, making up for tri-pod state, legs bent, tail aligned with spine, claws dug into earth, hackles raised. (Didn't count tightened abdomen, as it does nothing to defend him at the moment. The only reason why I counted it last time was because he was jumping. Next time just state that all muscles are tensed)
2 for attack. Bite to scruff +1, trip +1
3 for injuries. Severe bruise to left shoulder -2 (decided by judge) Severe bruise to throat, slight and temporary damage to the vocal cords -5
Round two LIAN Total: 24/50
VITUS:
4 for clarity: “The moment he felt those teeth latch on, felt the skin tear and his blood pour once more...” How severe? -2 “slashed across his cheek, the nail dangerously close to his eye.” How severe? In what way did it damage him? Which cheek? -3 “He snapped his jaws before the paw could retreat...” What paw? -1
6 for powerplaying. “he dropped down towards the ground,” Must be attempted -2 “as he threw himself upwards” Must be attempted -2,
5 for defences. eyes narrowed, legs bent, shoulders rolled, lips snarling, head aligned with spine.
3 for attack. Bite to front left paw, attempted hold and pull +3
4 for injuries. Moderate bruise to chest -1(determined by judge), moderate lacerations to left side of face -2 (determined by judge) minor bite to scruff -2 (determined by judge) minor bruise to left eye -1 (determined bu judge)
Round two VITUS Total: 22/50
Totals:
LIAN: 65/100
VITUS: 54/100
And the winner is...
Lian! Vitus must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Lian now has dominance over Vitus.
Damage:
Lian: Severe bruise to left shoulder will take 2 OOC weeks to heal. Severe bruise to throat, slight and temporary damage to the vocal cords. Bruise will fade in 3 OOC weeks, and during that time Lian's voice will be hoarse, and talking a lot will hurt.
Vitus:
Moderate bruise to chest will take 1 OOC week to heal, moderate lacerations to left side of face will take 2 OOC weeks to heal, and will scar if not seen by a healer, minor bite to scruff will that 1 OOC week to heal, and minor bruise to left eye will take 1 OOC week to heal, and during that time the vision will be blurry in that eye.
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For Kat:
Good fight! Solid first round, and then you slipped up on the second. Watch not saying how bad wounds are, such as minor, moderate or severe. Also, defensive are an easy 10 points, don't let that slide by! If you want a list of defenses just skype me. Try to go for more varied attacks as well, and don't avoid a players attack! That blow to the throat would have done some good damage, as well as stunning him for a bit.
For Arin:
I think that this was your first fight here? I know that you are knew to the system, so good fight! Also kudos for playing an inexperienced fighter! Same for you on most of Kat's points, watch the clarity and always be specific about what part of the wolf you are trying to attack. Those defense points are an easy go, if you had all 10 there it would have been a closer fight! If you want a list of defenses just skype me. Watch specifying how much damage you are taking as well, as well as attempting any movement that your opponent might be able to stop. So your rump swing in your first post was fine, because that did not alter your opponent. However, lowering your form without an attempt is not good, because Lian could have tried to stop him from going down. If you have any questions please feel free to skype or PM me!
- By [Evelyn]
