Round 1
AERNDIS:
9 for clarity: “in an attempt to close the distance between them.” So I did a lot of thinking on this and talked with another judge, and its hard to say if her chest slam would cause that much damage without knowing the space that was between them. Even if you just said “small gap” or “large distance” so that I have more of an idea. I don't like to assume anything. -1
10 for powerplaying. None seen.
10 for defences. Ears pinned to skull, head aligned with spine, tail alined with spine, chin tucked to chest, hackles raised, shoulders rolled, neck scrunched, eyes narrowed, legs spread, legs bent.
8 for attack. Shoulder check to chest +3, bite to nose, maim attempt +4, paw slam +1
10 for injuries.First round
Round one AERNDIS Total: 47/50
MEINX:
4 for clarity: “...bruising the front of her left shoulder...” How severe is the bruise? In Aerndis' attack, she was aiming for a severe bruise and knocking the wind out of Meinx, meaning that there was a lot of weight behind the attack. It would most likely be a severe bruise to her left shoulder. -1 “...she would aim to also shove her left shoulder forward, in the hopes of hitting Aerndis's left shoulder at the front, hoping to bruise, hoping to meet the opponents own attack with a shove.” Is this a shoulder slam, a shove, or both? A bit confusing on how you worded it. Also with their close distance, the shoulder throw would do very little damage, if any at all. -2, “..., blood would seep out of her cheek slightly...” so is this a minor wound? Moderate? -1 In your post, the way that you worded the movement was very confusing. It made it sound like Meinx moved a lot more than you maybe intended to come across. -1 “opponents own left forepaw from beneath her...” What part of the leg are you trying to pull at? Ankle? Top of the leg? -1
9 for powerplaying. There is a lot of movement in your post. So she side stepped twice, did her shoulder attack, a bite, and then a trip. The way that you worded it also made it sound like she side stepped three times. -1
10 for defences. Eyes narrowed, ears pinned, weight distributed, legs bent, head aligned with spine, claws dug in ground, tail tucked, hackles raised, chin tucked to chest, muscles tense.
6 for attack. Bite to left side of face + maim attempt +4, shoulder check +1 (lost points for clarity issues), leg pull +1
10 for injuries. First round. Severe bruise to left shoulder (decided by judge), Minor bite to left cheek (decided by judge), sprain to front left fore paw,
Round one MEINX Total: 39/50
Round 2
AERNDIS:
10 for clarity: All clear
10 for powerplaying. None seen
10 for defences. weight distributed, legs bent, tail aligned with spine, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, toes spread, claws dug in earth, shoulders rolled, hackles raised, lips snarling.
8 for attack. Bite to throat + grip attempt +4, claw slam to right eye + maim attempt
7 for injuries. Moderate bruise to left shoulder -1, moderate cuts above left eye -2
Round two AERNDIS Total: 45/50
MEINX:
8 for clarity: “While her opponents right forelimb would also hit along Meinx's back in the centre due to Meinx's repositioning, which would cause light bruising.” She wasn't aiming to hurt with her leg there, she was trying to balance herself. I mean you can take the damage if you want, but it wasn't intended. -1 “Meinx would aim to close the distance between them with a hug motion..” With them now both reared up, there shouldn't be any distance between them. -1
10 for powerplaying. None seen
10 for defences. tail tucked, ears pinned, eyes narrowed, weight distributed, muscles tense, hackles raised, claws dug in earth, legs bent, head aligned with spine.
4 for attack. Bite to both eyes + maim attempt +4
7 for injuries. Moderate bite to center of chest -2, minor lacerations on shoulders -1
Round two MEINX Total: 39/50
Totals:
AERNDIS: 92/100
MEINX: 78/100
And the winner is...
Aerndis! Meinx must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Aerndis is successful with removing Meinx's nose.
Damage:
Since it took so long, all damage will be healed.
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For Lunar
Not much to say, great fight, and good attacks!
For Luis
You need to watch your clarity, I found myself having to re-read your post a few times to try and understand what you were trying to say. Watch your wording, its very easy to get mixed up! Also I would say try for more solid, original attacks. For this fight it felt like you were re-using Aern's attacks against Meinx. So too much movement in the first post, and not enough in the second! If you have any questions, just PM me.
- By [Evelyn]
