Round 1
CAETO:
7 for clarity: “with his own shoulder” Which shoulder? -1, “He would try to pull her weight down, but his grip was not very strong in an effort to not harm her or even draw blood.” How is he trying to push her down? -2
4 for powerplaying. “he would turn to circle around her” Needs to be attempted, this is a lot of movement around her and she could intercept it at any point in time. -2, “he came in front of her in his traveling circle, about ten to fifteen feet away, he would start his move.” Needs to be attempted, saying you stopped in front of her is assuming that you were able to fully circle her without being stopped. Also distance should be agreed on. -2, “as he lunged at her,” needs to be attempted -1, “If they had collided, he would shuffle his back paws to gain more of a grip on the ground, and making his hind legs farther apart for better balance as well.” Minor conditional (if that then this) Try to avoid this as much as possible! Once your opponent attacks or moves, it can change this totally. -1
2 for defences. Ears pinned, tail aligned with spine,
4 for attack. Shoulder slam +1, bite to neck +3
10 for injuries.First round
Round one CAETO Total: 27/50
BASANTI:
9 for clarity: “She would move with his momentum, allowing it to absorb into her larger body.” How did she move with it? Did she lean, step back, jump back? -1
10 for powerplaying. None seen
1 for defences. Weight balanced for tri-pod state,
7 for attack. Shoulder to throat, more points for severity +2 bite to scruff + hold +4, paw slam +1
10 for injuries. First round. Severe bruise to right neck/shoulder
Round one BASANTI Total: 37/50
Round 2
CAETO:
3 for clarity: “...and hit exactly where she planned: his windpipe.” How much damage did this do? From Bas' intentions, it would have caused severe bruising as well as knocking the breath out of him. -1 “at least his top teeth to slide down her leg.” Where on her leg? There should be a clear mark when you hit. -2 “and push his out of the way enough so she only hit his very end toe.” How did he move it out of the way? Did he step? Lift it? How much damage did he take from that? -3 “to grab right onto his scruff a try and push him down.” How much damage did this do? -1
10 for powerplaying. None seen
1 for defences. Legs bent,
2 for attack. Bite to leg, lost points for clarity +2
5 for injuries. Sprained toes on left paw -3, moderate bite to scruff -2
Round two CAETO Total: 21/50
BASANTI:
10 for clarity: All clear
10 for powerplaying. None seen
10 for defences. Eyes narrowed, ears pinned, hackles raised, head level with spine, chin tucked, neck scrunched, shoulders rolled, legs spread, legs bent, toes splayed
3 for attack. Maintaining grip on scruff +2, Shove to ground +1,
9 for injuries. Minor lacerations on front right leg -1,
Round two BASANTI Total: 42/50
Totals:
CAETO: 48/100
BASANTI: 79/100
And the winner is...
Basanti! Caeto must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
CAETO: Sprained toes will take 2 OOC weeks to heal, moderate bite to scruff will take 1 OOC week to heal and may scar.
BASANTI: Severe bruise to neck/shoulder will take 1 OOC week to heal, minor lacerations will take 3 OOC days to heal.
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For CHRONO
You would have had MUCH higher scores if you put in defences! Those are the easiest 10 points you can get in a spar, basically the backbone of any fight. If you need a list, I can PM it to you if you want. Remember that you have to specify how much damage you take, and that all movement that your opponent may be able to stop/try to stop must be attempted. Remember to be specific when you are attacking as well. You might want to attack more as well, usually people will put in three attacks, a shove, bite, and paw swipe is what is usually seen.
For SECRETAFFAIR
Good fight, but you forgot your defences in your first round. No good! Try for more original/solid attacks to get your attack points up. Otherwise good job.
- By [Evelyn]
