Round 1
JUPITER:
7 for clarity: “Jupiter approaches slightly from the right” whos right? -1, how are Jups jaws positioned in relation to Katjas (ie perpendicular) judges cant use diagrams -2,
8 for powerplaying. Jup must attempt to lift her paw before she can try and slam it down -2
10 for defences. +1 for each seen
6 for attack. bite to the muzzle +3, shoulder check to throat +2, paw slam +1
10 for injuries.First round
Round one JUPITER Total: 41/50
KATJA:
9 for clarity: how exactly does Katja seek to lift herself? Using her front legs to push her up? -1
10 for powerplaying. none seen
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen
7 for attack. shoulder check to throat +2, maim to eyeballs +4, paw slap to nose +1
10 for injuries. First Round
Round one KATJA Total: 46/50
Round 2
JUPITER:
8 for clarity: how exactly does Jupiter seek to lift herself? i.e Using her front legs to push her up? -1, “She seeks to push and attack before the other can return two paws to the earth, hoping the her body pressing against hers also prevents Katja from falling fully, instead attempting to force her to the earth” With two females fighting the use of ‘her’ is very confusing -1,
9 for powerplaying. Jup must attempt to rise up -1,
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen
6 for attack. maim to eyes +4, shoulder check to throat +2
7 for injuries. bite to upper right neck -2, light bruise to her left shoulder -1
Round two JUPITER Total: 40/50
KATJA:
10 for clarity: clear to me
9 for powerplaying. Katja needs to attempt to place her forepaws back on the ground -1
10 for defences. +1 for each seen
6 for attack. shoulder check to leg +1, paw swipe +1, bite to underbelly +3, +1 for severity
7 for injuries. moderate lacerations across her muzzle -2, light bruising to lower jaw/chin -1
Round two KATJA Total: 42/50
Totals:
JUPITER: 81/100
KATJA: 88/100
And the winner is...
Katja! Jupiter must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
JUPITER: moderate bite to upper right neck (10 OOC days), light bruise to her left shoulder (3 OOC days)
KATJA: moderate wound to left cheek (10 OOC days) moderate lacerations to muzzle (7 OOC days), light bruising to chin (3 OOC days)
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For STAR
You post was clear and easy to understand until the second post, things got a little difficult to understand. Also remember to use complex/multistep attacks in all your posts for more points.
For TEA
Nothing really to note, your posts were clear and easy to read, you use complex attacks, have all your defenses, everything looks good to me.
- By [Saffie]
