Round 1
CHIONE:
4 for clarity: -2 how did she approach Aerndis, was she at an angle or still head on when she moved to the right. -2 when she attempted to collide with Aerndis hat part of her hit what? You said both that she tried to throw her body into Aerndis and that she tried to bump heads. -2 where was she positioned? How did she reach around to bite Aerndis? Was she trying to grab skin, flesh etc.? -2 where is she trying to bite? On the leg? Above it?
6 for powerplaying. -2 ‘then changing her direction to the woman’s right side’ you can’t assume that Chione was able to change direction. -2 ‘if she was successful she would then lunge’ this is a coincidental, put every attack down and don’t make them depend on the success of another one.
5 for defences. +1 for each seen.
3 for attack. +2 body slam/ head bump +2 bite
10 for injuries.First round
Round one CHIONE Total: 28/50
AERNDIS:
9 for clarity: mostly clear
10 for powerplaying. none seen
10 for defences. +1 for each seen
7 for attack. +2 shove to shoulder +4 bite/maim attempt +1 tripping
10 for injuries. First Round
Round one AERNDIS Total: 46/50
Round 2
CHIONE:
6 for clarity: -1 what kind of damage did she take to the face? -2 when she pushed herself at Aerndis did she rear up, did she rock her weight forward, did any paws ever leave the ground? -1 at what point did Chione lift her right paw
6 for powerplaying. -2 ‘Chione would pull her head and body backwards’ you must attempt this. -2 ‘Chione was able to move her head slightly more’ you must attempt to do this.
4 for defences. +1 for each seen -2 for not repositioning balance in her tripod stance
2 for attack. +1 attempted tripping +1 attemped shove
2 for injuries. -2 severe bruising to right forearm. -4 fracturing of left toes -2 moderate lacerations to face
Round two CHIONE Total: 20/50
AERNDIS:
8 for clarity: -2 how exactly did she get her legs around to kick at Chione while her forelimbs were wrapped around her neck?
10 for powerplaying. none seen
10 for defences. +1 for each seen
4 for attack. +1 leg drape +2 attempted drag down +1 kick
10 for injuries. none taken
Round two AERNDIS Total: 42/50
Totals:
CHIONE: 48/100
AERNDIS: 88/100
And the winner is...
AERNDIS Loser must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out. Chione is now blind in her right eye.
Damage:
CHIONE: severe bruising to right forearm will take a few ooc days to heal. fracturing of left toes will take a 4 IC weeks to heal and moderate lacerations to face will take 2 IC weeks to heal
AERNDIS: None
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For CHRONO Great fight! Make sure all your defenses are listed, and try to use ‘attempted’ and ‘tried’ more! Also try and put more complex attacks in :)
For LUNA Great fight! Nothing to note
- By [Dee]
