SIGMARR vs NIKOLAI for SPAR
Round 1
SIGMARR:
10 for clarity: Clear!
10 for powerplaying. None seen!
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen until max of 10
8 for attack. +4 Bite/grip, +2 shoulder throw +2 toe stomp + maim attempt
10 for injuries.First round
SIGMARR'S round one total: 48/50
NIKOLAI:
6 for clarity: -1 “Sigmarr's teeth bit into Nikolai's right cheek” The inside of his right cheek?, -1 “He then turned his head to the right” His right?, -2 “...into the skin on Sigmarr's side, right behind the boy's elbow” Which side/elbow?
7 for powerplaying. -1 “He kept his chest pressed tight to Sigmarr's shoulder” This needs to be attempted; otherwise you're assuming that Sigmarr doesn't move, -1 “He would not attempt to latch on there however...” I feel like you're not giving your opponent enough time to react., -1 “once his teeth left Sigmarr's side...” That's assuming the bite lands
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen until max of 10
7 for attack. +3 bite, +4 bite/grip,
10 for injuries.First round
NIKOLAI'S round one total: 40/50
Round 2
SIGMARR:
10 for clarity: Clear!
10 for powerplaying. None seen!
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen until max of 10
6 for attack. +4 bite/grip, toe stomp +2
7 for injuries. -2 for moderate bite, -1 scrapes
SIGMARR'S round two total: 43/50
NIKOLAI:
10 for clarity: All clear!
5 for powerplaying. -2 “His teeth met their mark behind the boy's elbow” In Lunar's last post, Sigmarr takes the hit elsewhere, -1 “watching Sigmarr's paw hit the ground again. “ You can't assume anything about your opponent, even if it seems obvious, -2 “Once his left paw was done with his first attempted attack he would keep his weight shifted to the right, lifting his left leg higher to attempt to shove his left forepaw into the base of Sigmarr's throat” Two attacks in a row by the same body part feels like powerplaying to me
10 for defenses. +1 for each seen until max of 10
2 for attack. +1 toe stomp, +1 shove
8 for injuries. -2 moderate bite
NIKOLAI'S round two total: 35/50
Totals:
SIGMARR: 92/100
NIKOLAI: 75/100
And the winner is...
Sigmarr! Nikolai must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
SIGMARR: Moderate bite: 2 OOC weeks, scrapes: 4 OOC days
NIKOLAI: Moderate bite: 2 OOC weeks
Notes:
Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Notes
For Lunar Great fight! Nothing to note!
For Shelby You lost the most points in powerplaying and I think I've mostly covered that in my deductions. Just remember that you can't assume anything about the way your opponent moves and try to avoid using the same body part more than once in a round.
- By [Lazuli]
