-2 “...preparing for a more or less head on charge.” Is she charging head on or not?
-2 “Her left foreleg would aim to land on the front of Sin’s right shoulder...” How exactly is her leg landing?
-2 “Finally Arietta would let her jaws snap towards Sin’s own muzzle in hopes of clamping down upon it and keeping him from using his own fangs.” How is she hoping to place her jaws?
-2 “...her right foreleg would aim to wrap around his neck...” Which side of his neck?
8 for powerplaying.
-2 “Once she got closer...” That's assuming she's allowed to approach.
10 for defenses.
+1 for each seen.
5 for attack.
+2 for foreleg attacks
+3
10 for injuries.
First round.
Arietta's round one total: 35/50
SIN: 4 for clarity:
-2 “Embedded into his skin, just below his head on the right side of his neck, bite wounds an inch or so deep would be made.” What's the severity of those wounds?
-2 “Maw opening wide and he attempted to strike and bite down on the back of her neck just behind her head.” How is he hoping to place his jaws?
-2 “Should he attain it, perhaps he'd shake her a little like a rag doll before dropping her.” Perhaps? Does he intend to do it or not?
6 for powerplaying.
-2 “Should he attain it, perhaps he'd shake her a little like a rag doll before dropping her.” This is considered an “if this, then that” and it's unfairly forcing your opponent to take more damage.
-2 “...to try and hook around her right forepaw, to hug it close to his body in an attempt to further disable her movement.” Wolf forelegs don't quite bend like that and I don't see how he could grab her paw if it's around his neck.
10 for defenses.
+1 for each seen to max of 10.
4 for attack.
+3 for bite
+1 for forepaw grab
10 for injuries.
First round.
Sin's round one total: 34/50
ROUND TWO
ARIETTA: 4 for clarity:
-2 “Teeth would sink in to the end of her neck, closer to her shoulders.” How close?
-2 “...to the limb closer to where it connected to the chest on the inside. ” How much closer?
-2 “Furthermore her fangs would seek to strike the area of Sin’s neck where she had once gotten a hold...” You should have restated where exactly for this post.
10 for powerplaying.
None seen!
9 for defenses.
+1 for each seen
4 for attack.
+1 for paw swipe
+3 for bite
3 for injuries.
-1 for mild bruising to foreleg (damage assigned by judge)
-2 for moderate bite wound to neck (damage assigned by judge)
Arietta's round two total: 30/50
SIN: 0 for clarity:
-2 “...scratching down the right side of his chest leaving light scratches in their wake.” Where exactly on his chest?
-2 “...jaws splayed as they shot to the right...” Whose right?
-2 “He would strive to grasp the top of her jaw in his...” How is he hoping to place his jaws?
-2 “...practically attempting to chest bump her and use his weight against her own, to bring her to the ground in submission.” Is he attempting to or not?
-2 “...practically attempting to chest bump her...” Where is he hoping to strike with his chest?
10 for powerplaying.
None seen!
9 for defenses.
+1 for each seen to max of 10.
-1 for not redistributing weight after rising up on hind legs.
5 for attack.
+3 for bite
+1 for grip attempt
+1 for chest bump
3 for injuries.
-1 for light scratches
-2 for moderate bite wound to lower jaw (damage assigned by judge for counter)
Sin's round two total: 27/50
Totals:
Arietta: 65/100 Sin: 61/100
And the winner is...
ARIETTA! Sin must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.
Damage:
Arietta:
Light bruising: 2 ooc days to heal
Moderate bite wound: 2 ooc weeks to heal
Sin:
Light scratches: 2 ooc days to heal
Moderate bite wound: 2 ooc weeks to heal
Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
For both: Good fight, guys! My notes are in the deductions above!
