*steals Arin's pretty code*
EINARR vs VALENTINE for RANK
ROUND ONE
Einarr
CLARITY |
- 2 what part of his body is he trying to collide into Valen?
- 2 what part of Valen is he trying to ram his body into?
- 1 the trapezius is a fairly large muscle area, where is he trying to get at it? You say upper (I interpret this as along the back) but where would this be? more on the shoulder? behind the shoulder? the dividing ligament?
| Total: 5 |
POWERPLAY |
- 1 you still need to attempt to close the distance
| Total: 9 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 for each seen
| Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+3 bite
+1 slam -1 for clarity issues
| Total: 4 |
INJURIES |
none, first round
| Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 38/50
Valentine
POWERPLAY |
- 1 This was a tricky one but I did some asking and "split seconds before impact was likely to be made" is still worded in a way that doesn't give your opponent room to maneuver or change up their approach.
| Total: 9 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 for each seen
-1 how did he redistribute his weight? Was it on three legs? two?
| Total: 9 |
ATTACK |
+2 shoulder jab
+3 bite +1 grip
+1 paw slam
| Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
none, first round
| Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 45/50
ROUND TWO
Einarr
CLARITY |
- 2 how severe is the damage from Valen's bite?
- 2 what part of Valen is he trying to hit with his tail?
| Total: 6 |
POWERPLAY |
- 2 Valen's attacks were pretty close in sucession, I feel that the bite should've landed before Einarr's lunge forward. The sudden shift up out of his first forward charge, then to all fours, then forward again is a fair amount of movement in a short span of time
| Total: 8 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 for each seen
-1 how is he trying to redistribute his weight? is it to three legs? two?
| Total: 9 |
ATTACK |
+ 3 bite
+ 1 toe stomp
+0 for tail attack, doesn't seem like it'd be to effective and there were clarity issues
| Total: 4 |
INJURIES |
- 2 severe bruising to chest
-1 light laceration to back
| Total: 7 |
Total for Round Two: 34/50
Valentine
CLARITY |
- 1 how did Valen move so Einarr's attack landed on the thigh, two inches above the ankle would be between the ankle and knee
| Total: 9 |
POWERPLAY |
- none seen
| Total: 10 |
DEFENSES |
+1 for each seen
| Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+3 bite +1 grip
+ 2 shoulder throw
+1 paw stomp
| Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
-1 moderate bruising to shoulder
-1 moderate bruising to toes
-2 moderate punctures to back leg
| Total: 6 |
Total for Round Two: 42/50
Totals:
And the winner is...
VALENTINE |
Einarr must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out.
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Damage:
Einarr |
- severe bruising to chest (1 ooc week to heal)
- light lacerations to back (1 ooc week to heal)
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Valentine |
- moderate lacerations to shoulder (2 ooc weeks)
- moderate bruising (5 days to heal)
- moderate punctures to back leg (2 ooc weeks to heal)
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Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
Keno | Not a bad showing, just work a bit more on your clarity. You want to devote as much time to the clarity of your secondary attacks as you do your first one.
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Lazuli | Badass as always. I don't have really anything to add, the few little things were minor, you're in top form!
- By [Lunarcat7]
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