SIN vs VALENTINE for SPAR
ROUND ONE
SIN
CLARITY |
– 2 “or at the base of the jawline, google isn’t helping me figure out how wide jaws can open” – (OOC posts are NOT required in IC posts. It can cause confusion and it’s really not necessary You need to be clear EXACTLY where you are attacking and putting it in a OOC note to specify isn’t counted towards that clarity.)
- 2 “His left paw sought to swipe at Valentine’s right […] to compromise the other male’s balance” (Are you attempting to..grab his paw and pull it out from under him? Or just raking your nails? I don’t understand how this would compromise his balance, or even what you are trying to do.)
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Total: 6 |
POWERPLAY |
– 2 “should he be successful in his endeaver, he wanted to violently shake his head” (This is a nested attack, you will want to wait to see if your attack lands before trying to worsen the damage.)
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Total: 8 |
DEFENSES |
Def +1 (legs) + 1 (toes) + 1 (claws) + 1 (tail) + 1 (hackles) + 1 (ears) + 1 (eyes) + 1 (scruff) + 1 (head) + 1 (weight) + 1 (teeth)
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 body/shoulder slam
+ 3 Bite to face
+ 0 paw swipe
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Total: 5 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
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Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 39 / 50
VALENTINE
CLARITY |
– 1 “valentine unwittingly avoided sin’s attempt to smash the toes of his right forefoot” (Sin’s move was a paw swipe not a smash)
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Total: 9 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 (lips) +1 (eyes) + 1 (teeth) + 1 (hackles) + 1 (tail) + 1 (stance) + 1 (toes) + 1(nails) + 1 (knees) + 1 (head)
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+2 gravity aided foot stomp/pin
+1 maim attempt to nose
+ 3 bite to muzzle
+ 1 grip attempt
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Total: 7 |
INJURIES |
- First round!
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Total: 10 |
Total for Round One: 46 / 50
ROUND TWO
SIN
CLARITY |
– 2 “(wasn’t trying to smash the toes)” Do not place OOC notes in IC posts. Even if they are there to “Fix” a mistake of your opponent. That is not your job, your job is to write a clear response to theirs. It’s the Judge’s job to catch those mistakes, which I did before your note.
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Total: 8 |
POWERPLAY |
– 1 “Head shake + Snap attempt” (Because your last post, the bite and head shake was nested. By shaking and then moving you do not give enough time for your opponent to respond. Moves and arounds are usually only a second or two long at most, so you cannot realistically fit all these movements in.)
- 2 “Sin would move abruptly to the right” (Movements that involve your opponent including “formations” must be writing in a clear attempt)
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Total: 7 |
DEFENSES |
+ 1 (weight) + 1 (eyes) + 1 (hackles) + 1 (ears) + 1 (tail) + 1 (muscles) + 1 (teeth) + 1 (shoulders) + 1 (Toes)
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Total: 9 |
ATTACK |
+ 1 head shake
+ 3 snap attempt
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Total: 4 |
INJURIES |
- 1 bruise to right shoulder
- 2 lacerations along muzzle
- 1 leg cuts to right foreleg
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Total: 6 |
Total for Round Two: 34 / 50
VALENTINE
DEFENSES |
Def + 1 (chin) + 1 (head) + 1 (paws) + 1 (nails) + 1 (stance) + 1 (knees) + 1 (Shoulders) + 1 (ears) + 1 (eyes) + 1 (lips)
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Total: 10 |
ATTACK |
+ 2 body shove
+ 3 bite to shoulder
+ 1 grip attempt
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Total: 6 |
INJURIES |
- 1 Mild lacerations to forehead
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Total: 9 |
Total for Round Two: 45 / 50
Totals:
PLAYER 1 |
39 + 34 = 73 / 100
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PLAYER 2 | 46 + 45 = 91 / 100
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And the winner is...
VALENTINE |
SIN must give up by submitting, fleeing or passing out.
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Damage:
SIN |
Bruise to Right shoulder – 1 OOC weeks to heal
Moderate lacerations to muzzle – 2 OOC weeks to heal, potential to scar
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VALENTINE |
Moderate bruise to right shoulder – 1 OOC week to heal
Shallow lacerations and puncture wounds to neck – 2 OOC weeks to heal fully
Mild to Moderate lacerations to forehead – 1-2 OOC weeks to heal fully
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Notes:
Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):
DRAGON |
You need to stop placing OOC notes in your IC posts. As I’ve already said it adds confusion to your post and it can be seen as spiteful or even rude. Also, you do too much in such a short time frame. Remember, rounds are very very short, so there’s only so much you can do! I have to add, though, that I got severe Dejavu with those defenses, did you copy paste? XD Aside from those notes, and being sure that everything is clear and easy to understand, you’re doing well. Keep it up!
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LAZULI |
As always, you are a Beast! I don’t have much notes for you, aside from maybe double checking paw slams to paw swipes? Erm, keep up the good work? xD This section is always super short for you.
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- By [Arin]
