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Esti

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Iko

The Ooze Participant
08-25-2015, 01:46 PM


Yes. Esti needed to be here. She could feel it in her heart. All of her worries about the pack, her rank, her relationships, and even Ashmedai at the moment could be cured, at least momentarily, by a nice fight. Impatiently, the woman paces around in a zig-zagging pattern to fight a good clean spot to fight. Man it was hot... Thunder rumbled in the distance. Maybe it would rain soon. Coming to a nice little clearing, Esti wasted no time, throwing her head up and calling an opponent. Her tone would clearly show through. Her call would roughly, "Spar. Now. Make it fast." or something similar. She would, of course, introduce herself to whoever came her way, but that's all she felt towards pleasantries. It didn't matter who they were if she was beating their butt, or vice versa.

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Arcus

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08-25-2015, 02:08 PM
Shaye made the cogs move in his mind, the idea of fighting. She wanted to learn...but did he really know enough to teach her? He would have to find out, now wouldn't he? Most of what he knew was instinct, rather than actual combat. He would trot towards the battlefield, his head staring forward with intent. He had a mission, and today was the perfect day to attempt to battle. The storms that thundered in the sky echoed in his chest, fueling his fire and giving him determination. Deep blue eyes would narrow as he rolled across the territories, ears perking at the sound of a rather demanding call. At least he wouldn't have to wait too long. A smirk would spread across his lips as he moved in the direction of her summonance, lightning streaking across the sky. He approached her intently, his lips drawn into a deep frown.

He didn't say anything to her, just dipped his head in greeting as he fluidly set up his stance. Shaye flashed through his mind, her adoreable stance and silly growl. With a shake of his head he'd lower it, keeping his eyes on his opponent as his chin ducked and jaws parted. Lips would curl up, showing glistening canines as his face transformed into that of a beast. Deep eyes would narrow as he stared at her, searching for a weakness or an in. There was a distance of 10 feet between them, which, with one sudden thrust on coiled, bent knees, he began to close. Paws would spread to shoulder width apart in his bounds, his toes and nails digging into earth each bound. His shoulders would raise, pushing skin and fur to protect his delicate neck, as his hackles and fur rose on end too. Tail was level behind him, like a flag or a rudder to help his balance. He approached her headlong, eyes glinting before he suddenly shifted to his left (her right) around two feet away. He didn't slow, using his momentum to his advantage. Shoulder would roll forward as a lance as he attempted to drive it into the soft joint between right shoulder and chest. The impact would be great, if it hit, and he hoped he could drive her right shoulder out of socket and out of commission. He hoped his momentum would aid in the bone rattling impact he desired, much like thunder crashing through the sky. With gaping jaws he'd swing his head to the right, hoping to latch on to the soft muscle along her neck, close to where her shoulders jut out. He hoped for a solid grip, to dig his teeth into flesh and take control of her neck, if possible. His right forepaw would reach forward, snaking in an attempt to wrap around her right forepaw and hopefully tug it towards his chest and out from under her, to disrupt her balance.

Arcus v Esti
Round 1 of 2
For Spar




Esti

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08-25-2015, 02:38 PM


The male approached and Esti slipped into a loose, easy smile as he nodded at her. The quiet type, huh? She wondered if he was a healer, like Revenge, but quickly dismissed the thought. For now, he was a warrior and her opponent. He didn't waste any time setting his stance and then barreling towards her. Pretty brave for someone fighting someone half a foot taller than them.

Kicking off, Esti aimed to close the distance, which was around 10 feet between the two. Quickly, she worked in her defenses. Her ears pinned to her skill, her lips curling and her face scrunching for protection. Her shoulders rolled the thick scruff around her neck. In addition, she tucked her chin to add extra coverage to her neck. With each step, her nails would dig into the ground, her toes spreading wide for traction. Her weight was evenly distributed to all four limbs which remained slightly bent for agility even as she ran. Her hackles stood rigid down her back, leading to her tail which flagged out behind her for added balance. They drew closer and closer to impact. It was happening. Three... two...

Sike! As Arcus stepped towards his left, Esti stepped towards her right, creating a small distance between them. Because of this distance, Arcus would be unable to even graze Esti with his shoulder. Arcus's right forepaw missed Esti's right forepaw swooping into the area between her foreleg and hind leg as she aimed to come up alongside Arcus's right side. His bite, which was aimed towards her shoulder, scraped down Esti's right side starting just behind her ribs towards her flank. Two moderate, but deep gashes would be made and the titan woman winced at the pain. She wondered, just for a second, if it would scar, but decided it didn't matter. Bracing for impact, Esti attempted to drive the sharp, forward part of her right shoulder into the brute's gut, just behind his ribs. Esti aimed to quickly dive to grip Arcus's right flank, opening her jaws and rotating her head slightly to her left as her head swung right. Her upper jaw sought the area where Arcus's right hind leg met his body, her lower jaw seeking to wrap around to part of the underbelly and, if they weren't both careful, his sheath. She lifted her right foreleg, redistributing her weight to her other three legs, and attempted to hook it around Arcus's middle right hind leg, just below his knee. She aimed to pull the limb towards her chest while using whatever collision force she had to attempt to knock over the smaller boy and force him to submit.


Esti vs. Arcus
Round 1/2 for SPAR

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Arcus

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08-25-2015, 03:09 PM
As the woman slipped passed them and the impact he had been expecting and bracing forward never came he couldn't help but let out a gasp that quickly transformed into a snarl. He moved to follow her, to twist his body around and not allow her to get the upper hand on his unprotected side. Tail would swiftly flow under him, protecting his underbelly and special areas from her teeth should she get so far. His teeth would slice along her side, but failed to achieve the hold he wanted. Blue eyes would narrow and ears would press back as his lips curled dangerously. He'd watch her, as if in slow motion, flowing passed him as his own momentum pushed him forward. The impact that he hadn't been expecting hit his gut, nearly knocking the wind from him as the shoulder crashed into the tender area between his ribs and his right hock. A bruise would form there, deep and painful, tender, but not too severe.

But good things seemed to come from the pain, the impact would help him twist around, evading her teeth. His hind end would stumble at the hit, twisting out of her reach but not by much. He breathed a breath of relief as her teeth clipped air, and he'd growl, coiling up his muscles in the milaseconds it took for all this to happen. His hind legs would bend, bracing as toes and nails dug into the earth. With a savage growl he'd lung, aiming for her own rear end that had flowed passed him. He hoped to colide his chest with her right back limb, hoping his momentum would drive the wide flat of his chest directly into her hind end, directly across the outter thigh of her right back limb. Gaping jaws would aim, hopefully with more precision this time, towards her tail bone, hoping to dig in with a solid grip and cause pain to this sensitive area. In all this time his balance would remain strong, at a good shoulder width apart, and his shoulders rolled forward to protect his precious neck. His under neck would remain out of reach, with how close he hoped to be to her leg and reaching, there wouldn't be a way for her to sink her teeth under. His fur would remain on end, his muscles tight and ready for whatever she had for him.

Arcus v Esti
Round 2 of 2
For Spar




Esti

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08-25-2015, 05:16 PM


Her bite would miss, her hook would miss. Damn. As her shoulder hit the other, his rear would spin away from her, out of reach. Esti would attempt to follow it, redistributing her weight as her right forepaw landed back on the ground and jumping forward. Jumping forward caused her right side to spike with pain, but Esti gritted her teeth and tried to ignore it for now, Adrenalin fresh in her system. With her forward movement, Arcus's chest wouldn't hit her hind legs, but rather, his right shoulder would pass roughly over her rump and under her tail. It was awkward as hell, but it didn't hurt. It did, however, put him in range for... ouch. Yup, there it was. Arcus's teeth closed around the base of Esti's tail. The momentum that carried his shoulder across her butt cause his teeth to scrape down the length of her tail painfully before his teeth slipped off near the middle of her tail, causing moderate scrapes from the base of her tail to the middle of her tail. She hoped the long furs of her tail got stuck between his teeth.

Esti kept her shoulders rolled, tucking her chin once again for protection. Her lips curled up in a snarl, her face and eyes scrunching. Her ears remained pinned and her hackles remained fluffed. As soon as Arcus's teeth slid from her tail, Esti tucked it under to protect it and her underbelly. Her weight was already distributed evenly, and her stance was decently wide, her knees bent, nails in the ground, and toes splayed. It was her turn.

With her forward momentum, Esti attempted to grip onto his upper right hind leg. Her head tilted to her left, her upper jaw aiming for the skin to the right of the base of his tail, while her lower jaw sought to bite the area on the hip just back and up from the flank. Her bite was aimed at encompassing his upper hind leg muscles that draped below the right of his spine. Again she lifted her right forepaw, redistributing her weight evenly to her other three paws, and sought to wrap her right forelimb around his hind right leg level with the hock, and pull it towards her. Simultaneously, Esti aimed to ram the center of her chest into her opponent's right hind leg at the knee, hoping to knock him off balance once and for all.


Esti vs. Arcus
Round 2/2 for SPAR

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The Judge

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10-16-2015, 03:08 PM

ARCUS vs ESTI for SPAR



ROUND ONE

ARCUS:
6 for clarity:

  • -2 “Shoulder would roll forward as a lance as he attempted to drive it into the soft joint between right shoulder and chest.” Which shoulder is he using?
  • -2 “With gaping jaws he'd swing his head to the right, hoping to latch on to the soft muscle along her neck, close to where her shoulders jut out.” I think more information is needed here. How close? By shoulders do you mean her shoulder blades? Is this the side of her neck? The back?
4 for powerplaying.
  • -2 “There was a distance of 10 feet between them, which, with one sudden thrust on coiled, bent knees, he began to close.” This should have been attempted; distance and closing it should have been attempted
  • -2 “He approached her headlong...” Same as above; position should have been attempted
  • -2 “...before he suddenly shifted to his left (her right) around two feet away.” Same as above; you're assuming your opponent didn't move and not giving her time to react
9 for defenses.
  • +1 for each seen
8 for attack.
  • +2 for shoulder throw
    +1 for severity
  • +3 for bite
    +1 for grip
  • +1 for paw swipe
10 for injuries.
  • First round.

Arcus's round one total: 37/50


ESTI:
3 for clarity:

  • -2 “As Arcus stepped towards his left, Esti stepped towards her right, creating a small distance between them.” Esti stepping to her right as Arcus steps to his left would actually bring them chest to chest and no additional distance would be made since they are both moving in the same direction.
  • -2 “Arcus's right forepaw missed Esti's right forepaw swooping into the area between her foreleg and hind leg as she aimed to come up alongside Arcus's right side.” If they are chest to chest after Esti moves to her right, how is she now moving along his right side?
  • -1 “...scraped down Esti's right side starting just behind her ribs towards her flank.” Close to her spine? Somewhere in the middle? Closer to her belly?
  • -1 “...forward part of her right shoulder into the brute's gut, just behind his ribs.” Same as above
  • -1 “She lifted her right foreleg, redistributing her weight to her other three legs, and attempted to hook it around Arcus's middle right hind leg, just below his knee.” What part of her foreleg is she using?
8 for powerplaying.
  • -2 “Because of this distance, Arcus would be unable to even graze Esti with his shoulder.” With them being chest to chest there's nothing keeping Arcus's shoulder from making contact somewhere
10 for defenses.
  • +1 for each seen to max of 10
6 for attack.
  • +2 for shoulder throw
  • +3 for bite
  • +1 for paw swipe
10 for injuries.
  • First round.

Esti's round one total: 37/50


ROUND TWO


ARCUS:
4 for clarity:

  • -1 “He moved to follow her, to twist his body around...” Through most of the post Arcus is moving away, but you never state what kind of new positioning he's hoping for.
  • -1 “A bruise would form there, deep and painful, tender, but not too severe.” Is it moderate then?
  • -2 “Gaping jaws would aim, hopefully with more precision this time, towards her tail bone...” I think more detail is needed here. Which part of her tailbone? I think the canine equivalent of a human tailbone is the whole tail
  • -2 What happened to Esti's paw swipe? Even if it missed you should still state what became of it
10 for powerplaying.
  • None seen!
8 for defenses.
  • +1 “Tail would swiftly flow under him...”
  • +1 “Blue eyes would narrow...”
  • +1 “...ears would press back...”
  • 0 “...his lips curled dangerously.”
  • +1 “...coiling up his muscles...” and “...his muscles tight...”
  • +1 “His hind legs would bend...”
  • +1 “as toes and nails dug into the earth...”
  • 0 “In all this time his balance would remain strong, at a good shoulder width apart...” Balance isn't the same as stance
  • +1 “...his shoulders rolled forward to protect his precious neck.”
  • +1 “His fur would remain on end...”
5 for attack.
  • +2 for chest slam
  • +3 for bite
9 for injuries.
  • -1 for moderate bruising to right flank (severity decided by judge)
Arcus's round two total: 36/50


ESTI:
10 for clarity:  
  • All clear!
10 for powerplaying.
  • None seen!
10 for defenses.
  • +1 for each seen to max of 10
7 for attack.
  • +3 for bite
    +1 for grip
  • +1 for paw swipe
  • +2 for chest slam
9 for injuries.
  • -1 for moderate scrapes to tail

Esti's round two total: 46/50

Totals:


ARCUS: 73/100
ESTI: 83/100


And the winner is...


Esti! Arcus must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:

Enough time has passed that all wounds have healed


Notes:


Tips for writing and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here):

For both: You both lost the most points in clarity and because of that this fight was a little difficult to read. Try to explain everything your character is doing or attempting clearly and as simply as possible. By over complicating explanations or neglecting to explain important details you run the risk of confusing your opponent and muddying the round, which could, in turn, mess up the next round and lead to low scores.

- By [Lazuli]