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01-05-2014, 11:44 PM (This post was last modified: 01-12-2014, 11:45 AM by Zajia.)
Spring was settling in well in the north, and Zajia seemed to have found one of the very few spots that was no longer covered in snow. This place was very rocky and diverse, allowing for very little planthrowth and quite a bit of freshly farmed prey. Her amethyst orbs were focused on a small blackbird who had dared cross her path. It was obviously young and inexperienced but it was fat with the plumpness offered by a well nurtured upbringing. Zajia smiled and wriggled her haunches in preparation. It didn't have a chance.
With a calm and smooth movement, Zajia advanced in stealthy silence. Her paws barely touched the ground as she pushed onward towards the bird. Her tail was straight out behind her and her tan pelt blended well with her rocky surroundings. The bird had no idea what was about to happen when the fae leapt through the air and landed a swift paw heavily against its neck. It had truly not had a chance in the world.
Zajia picked up the bird in her jaws and crunched down on its skull in satisfaction. An easy hunt. Without a word or grunt to any being, the slender woman carried her kill up onto a tall rock and layed herself down to eat, constantly keeping an amethyst eye on the narrow valley below her. Perhaps she would be queen of this place, so far from her place of birth.



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01-12-2014, 11:57 AM
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The smell of death hung thick in the air. Her fur was coated in blood, only seen in the white bits of her pelt. She looked like a demon and that she was. She ran through the pass as if she had no care. Her muscles rippled with each thrust upon the ground. Those purple eyes flicked around until she saw a little creature snatch up a kill. Six stopped, her paws dug into the earth. She stared at the little brown Wolf whom feasted upon their rock. The black demoness giggled softly and began to climb up, her paws placed very delicately. As she arrived upon the ledge she stayed away from the little Wolf as it ate. She then cleared her throat. "Quite the catch, little one." Her voice was that of nightmares, haunting. She grinned and licked her right paw as she raised it. Like a Cat. "Who is this little one?"









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01-12-2014, 12:09 PM
Amethyst orbs squinted down upon the form of a large black and white female who had apparently decided to approach one such as herself. She continued chewing the meat from the bones of her kill as if no change had occurred and then was surprised to hear a deep and demonic voice adressing her from just below where she lie.
The woman appeared to be part feline in the way that she carried herself, and in rhe mindless way that she spoke. Zajia was not amused.
"This little one is royalty and will be treated as such. I own this land and you are indeed trespassing. What have you to say for yourself?"
She felt not the need to mention that she had just claimed it that morning, but nonetheless, she did not like the idea of trespassers. Tan cranium was held high, a look of hautiness printed across her pretty features. If the woman did not comply, she would have to use force.



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01-12-2014, 12:19 PM
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Stared down at the small girl. She heard the others words and instantly growled. The fur on the back of her neck stood up slightly. Her muscles tensed. This little bitch had no clue who she was messing with. Six stepped forward and snarled, spit flying forward slightly. Her purple eyes narrowed with anger. "Listen here, bitch. I smell no borders. I see no Queen. Now, say your sorry or I will crush your skull and sip out the brain matter." Six rolled her shoulders and flattened her ears. The girl was so horribly tempered. Yet, she doubted the little princess could do anything to her.









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01-12-2014, 12:28 PM (This post was last modified: 01-12-2014, 12:28 PM by Zajia.)
A growl rose dangerously from the girls chest and into the back of her throat, hackles rising along her spine in anger. Who was this bitch to speak to her in such a manner? She had no right and no motive to treat her in such a way. Zajia had only stated a fact and acted her part.
The tan woman dropped her kill to the ground, completely forgotten, and stood to her paws. Her muscles tensed and she hopped down from her perch.
"I am queen, bitch. And you'd do right to keep your damn comments to a minimum before I have your tongue removed. Got it?" Her amethyst orbs were blazing with the fire of batyle, her teeth and claws aching to take on the larger femme. She would learn the proper way to speak to a queen if it meant Zajia had to beat it into her.



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01-12-2014, 12:45 PM
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Stared at the tan woman as she got up and stared at the monster that is Six. The jet black and bright white behemoth got into her fighting stance. Her tail aligned with her spine, her ears flat, her eyes narrowed, her knees bent, her lips curled, her neck tucked, her hackles raised, and her paws firm. She gently shook her head. "I don't think you want this.." She then licked her lips, "Then again, I do not care." She then charged at the tan girl before her, without a second thought. She attempted to slam her chest into the other girls then raise her front legs. Six would try to wrap her legs around the other girls shoulders and head to gain leverage. Though, her jaws would also aim to clamp down on the other girl's right ear. Six was no good at patience, she would go to make her mark. She wished to maim the other girl by taking her right ear.

Six v Zajia

MAIM/DOMINANCE

1/3

Defenses: Her tail aligned with her spine, her ears flat, her eyes narrowed, her knees bent, her lips curled, her neck tucked, her hackles raised, and her paws firm.

Attack: She then charged at the tan girl before her, without a second thought. She attempted to slam her chest into the other girls then raise her front legs. Six would try to wrap her legs around the other girls shoulders and head to gain leverage. Though, her jaws would also aim to clamp down on the other girl's right ear.

Injuries: None.









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01-12-2014, 01:35 PM
Zajia's eyes filled with disbelief at the defiance sported by the woman who stood before her. Never in her life had she been treated with such disrespect and bold outright hatred. She had never truly been a coddled pup, but she certainly knew what it was to have a name for yourself. This woman obviously had no idea who she was.
Anger seething behind amethyst eyes, Zajia positioned herself in front of the femme in preparation for attack. She tucked her chin close to her chest, planted all four paws firmly on the ground, spread apart, her knees slightly bent, and allowed her banner to fan out neatly behind her tailbone in perfect alignment. With a low growl, Zajia squinted her eyes at the woman and laid her ears back. If it was a fight she wanted, a fight she would get.
The woman came at her with her teeth bared. Zajia stayed exactly where she was and allowed the woman to crash into her chest, her right paw raising to push the woman's shoulder away. She would use this right paw to gain a better angle on the attacking woman, so that she may aim her parted jaws at the girl's throat. She felt teeth clutching her ear and ignored the pain, knowing that her teeth had only made slight contact in the struggle of battle.


Six v Zajia
MAIM/DOMINANCE
1/3
Defenses: She tucked her chin close to her chest, planted all four paws firmly on the ground, spread apart, her knees slightly bent, and allowed her banner to fan out neatly behind her tailbone in perfect alignment. Right paw raised to push her away.
Attack: She would use this right paw to gain a better angle on the attacking woman, so that she may aim her parted jaws at the girl's throat.
Injuries: Slight lacerations on her right ear.



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01-14-2014, 04:26 PM
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OOC: Im going to assume Six has her right paw over Za's shoulder since it was sorta implied in ur post. <3 PM me if u have any questions.
Six's various attacks hit. Her right leg was slung over Zaija's left shoulder and her teeth snapped at the other womans ear, slicing it slightly. Though, the little brown Wolf came at Six all the same. The tan girl's teeth met with the black and white girl's shoulder area, more near her collarbone then anything. She snarled at the pain, blood slid down her jet black coat. The black and white behemoth was still set. Her knees bent, tail extended and aligned with her spine, her paws firm, her ears flat against her skull, hackles raised, eyes slit, and lips curled. Six growled, her left shoulder was pushed away slightly, only denying her of raising both legs around Za's shoulders. Six would dive back in with her jaws snapping at Za's ear once again, hoping to do some major damage. Six would also use her leg, that was raised over the other woman's shoulder, to attempt to push the other down to gain leverage.

Six v Zajia

MAIM/DOMINANCE

2/3

Defenses: The black and white behemoth was still set. Her knees bent, tail extended and aligned with her spine, her paws firm, her ears flat against her skull, hackles raised, eyes slit, and lips curled.

Attack: Six would dive back in with her jaws snapping at Za's ear once again, hoping to do some major damage. Six would also use her leg, that was raised over the other woman's shoulder, to attempt to push the other down to gain leverage.

Injuries: Bite wound to her neck/collarbone area.







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01-15-2014, 08:44 PM
The smaller tan woman felt teeth bite down hard on her ear once again, the claws of the bitch digging into her skin like talons. Hot crimson blood ran swiftly into the cavities of her ears. Pain shot through her noggin like lightning, causing her anger to boil up inside of her chest and burst out in the form of a growl from between her jaws. Amethyst eyes widened with fury as Zajia brought her right paw down firmly to the ground, shifted her weight to her left side and pushed hard against the female, allowing the woman to keep her jaws clamped onto her ear in hopes of knocking her onto her back. If successful, the tan woman would use the new position to her benefit in pinning her to the ground with her jaws clamped around Six's neck.

Six v Zajia
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Defenses: Zajia brought her right paw down firmly to the ground, shifted her weight to her left side and pushed hard against the female, allowing the woman to keep her jaws clamped onto her ear in hopes of knocking her onto her back
Attack: the tan woman would use the new position to her benefit in pinning her to the ground with her jaws clamped around Six's neck.
Injuries: Harsh wound to the right ear, claw puncture wounds to the left shoulder.



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01-16-2014, 07:19 PM
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The black and white woman's attack landed. Her yellowed teeth tore into the other girl's ear easily. Six thouroughly enjoy the blood that ran down her muzzle and neck, along with her throat. She swallowed the crimson liquid without any sort of shame. Though, she was shoved back with a grunt, her grip on the ear would be no more, but would likely cause more ripping of the gentle flesh. Za still had a hold of Six's collarbone. The tan woman tried to push Six back, but the black and white girl was slightly larger. Such a move would be a little difficult but the brute would stumble back none the less. Za's grip on Six's collarbone would be effected by such. Six would attempt to regain her defenses by flattening her ears, raising her hackles, aligning her tail with her spin, slitting her eyes, bending her knees, digging her claws into the earth below, and curling her jet black lips. Six attempted to stumble forward and try to launch at the other girl once again. Her mangy jaws would snap for that blood ear once more, hoping to cause as much damage as she can.

SIX V ZAJIA

3/3

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Defenses: Six would attempt to regain her defenses by flattening her ears, raising her hackles, aligning her tail with her spin, slitting her eyes, bending her knees, digging her claws into the earth below, and curling her jet black lips.

Attack: Six attempted to stumble forward and try to launch at the other girl once again. Her mangy jaws would snap for that blood ear once more, hoping to cause as much damage as she can.

Injuries: Bite wound to her collarbone/neck area. Off balance.









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01-18-2014, 10:16 PM
A sharp yelp escaped from Zajia's lips as the bi-colored devil latched onto her ear once more. She didn't have any time to think, but she knew what she had to do. Without a second thought, Zajia jerked her head backward and felt the tender flesh of her ear tear, splitting her ear into two. She yowled in pain and used her anger to fuel her next attack. Zajia had her paws placed firmly on the ground, her banner held evenly in alignment with her spine and her knees bent enough to give her the push she needed to aim her jaws with full gusto at the wound she had already inflicted on the woman, aiming for the bone. She wanted to send this bitch running back to the hole she had crawled out of. She would crunch down hard on her collarbone, hopefully hard enough to get Six onto her back in a successful pin.

Six v Zajia
MAIM/DOMINANCE
3/3
Defenses: Zajia jerked her head backward and felt the tender flesh of her ear tear, splitting her ear into two, keeping her paws placed firmly on the ground, her banner held evenly in alignment with her spine, knees bent
Attack: aim her jaws with full gusto at the wound she had already inflicted on the woman, aiming for the bone. She would crunch down hard on her collarbone, hopefully hard enough to get Six onto her back in a successful pin.
Injuries: Ripped right ear, claw puncture wounds to the left shoulder.



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SIX v ZAJIA for MAIM / DOMINANCE



Round 1
SIX:

8 for clarity- A short but generally clear post, with a few grammar issues. (-2)

6 for powerplaying. no time was given for your opponent to react to the charge (-1), no angle or approximate distance was given from which direction Six was coming from or what part of Zajia's chest she wanted to hit (-2), wrapping her paws right after her attempted slam is a lot of movement with no reaction time for Zajia (-1)

7 for defenses. tail aligned with spine, ears flat, eyes narrowed, knees bent, lips curled, neck tucked, hackles raised,

6 for attack. slamming with chest(+2), wrapping legs around shoulders(+1), biting at right ear(+3)< br>
10 for injuries.First round

Round one SIX Total: 37/50


ZAJIA:

7 for clarity- Some phrases don't make sense, creating some clarity issues. (-2) The post could have been more detailed. (-1)

0 for powerplaying. Zajia is much smaller than Six, without moving against her charge, she should be affected somehow and should have taken damage to her chest (-3), you can not assume that your attacks hit, there was no attempt to use her right paw (-2), as Zajia didn't move against Six's attacks, there's no reason for the injuries to her ear to be so slight (-2), you don't mention Six's attempt to get her legs wrapped around Zajia's shoulders (-2) , you need to specify how much damage was done to Zajia's ear - how deep are the wounds? Is she missing flesh? Is it torn? Ripped apart? (-2) br>
6 for defenses. chin tucked, on all four paws, knees bent, tail out, eyes squinted, ears back

4 for attack. batting with right paw (+1), biting at throat (+3)< br>
10 for injuries.First round

Round one ZAJIA Total: 27/50

Round 2

SIX:

7 for clarity- Some grammar and clarity issues (-2) The post could have been more detailed (-1)

7 for powerplaying. You need to specify the injuries to Six's shoulder - how deep is the wound? How much is it bleeding? (-2), you don't specify which leg is raised over Zalia's shoulder? (-1)

6 for defenses. knees bent, tail aligned with spine, ears flat, hackles raised, eyes slit, lips curled,

5 for attack. bite to Zalia's ear (+3), attacking damaged area (+1), pushing down with her leg for leverage (+1)< br>
7 for injuries. bite wound to neck (-3)

Round two SIX Total: 32/50


ZALIA:

6 for clarity- "the claws... digging into her skin" Six never attacked with her claws (-2), this post could have much been more detailed (-2)

2 for powerplaying. Zajia is much smaller than Six, she can not get her onto her back by simply pushing against her (-2), you can not position your opponent without it being pp"would use the new position to her benefit in pinning her to the grounod" (-3), you can not have your attacks auto hit without it being pp "jaws clamped around Six's neck" (-3)

2 for defenses. paw returned to the ground, weight shifted

4 for attack. pushing with her left side(+1), biting at Six's neck (+3) < br>
6 for injuries. harshly torn ear(-3), scratches to shoulder (-1)

Round two ZAJIA Total: 20/50


Round 3
SIX:

8 for clarity- Some minor clarity issues, but a generally clear post. Better on the detail with this one.

5 for powerplaying. don't assume the amount of bloodshed from your opponent (-2), no attempt made with the snap for Zajia's ear (-1), you need to elaborate on damage done by yout opponent (-2)

7 for defenses. ears flattened, hackles raised, tail aligned with spine, eyes slit, knees bent, claws digging into ground, lips curled

4 for attack. bite to Zajia's ear (+3), bite to injured area (+1)< br>
6 for injuries. Bite to neck (-3), off balance (-1)

Round three SIX Total:30/50


ZAJIA:

7 for clarity-missing a lot of detail. (-3)

4 for powerplaying. six was never pinned (-3), your attacks must be attempts "she would crunch down hard on her collarbone" (-3)

3 for defenses. paws on the ground, tail aligned with spine, knees bent,

3 for attack. bite to Six's neck / throat (+3)< br>
6 for injuries. ear split in two, minor maim (-4)

Round three ZAJIA Total: 23/50

Totals:


Six: 99/150

Zajia: 70/150



And the winner is...


Six! Zajia must give up by either submitting, fleeing, or passing out.

Damage:


Six- No major injuries taken.


Zalia- missing half of her right ear.


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Tips for both writing, and some suggestions. (no points are deducted here)
Wolves don't have collarbones! Other than that, both of you could use more defenses in your posts - and although short posts are fine, be sure to be clear with directions, angles, injuries and intentions regardless of the length. Be careful of how you word your attacks, PP got you both quite a bit during this fight. If you have any questions send me a message here or on skype!



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